Tuesday, February 21, 2012

Flash-Fiction: Mistake

Writers' Platform-Building Campaign

It's time for the first challenge in the Platform-Building Campaign. Here are the rules...

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count. 
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these:
  • end the story with the words: "everything faded." (also included in the word count)
  • include the word "orange" in the story
  • write in the same genre you normally write
  • make your story 200 words exactly!


Alright, this was super fun! I sat down to jot down some ideas for this challenge and quickly came up with my entry.  I even managed to end with "everything faded", included orange, wrote in my genre and made the story 200 words. Wow, right? Hmmmm....I probably should been working on my WIP instead or sleeping. But...well...this is writing so, um...it's not really a waste of time...

Enjoy!

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Mistake


Shadows crept across the wall. Guppy’s heart thundered in his chest. His palms grew slick with sweat. He slipped into his closet and hid behind his lucky orange chess club t-shirt and matching slacks.

“Guppy,” the soft voices whispered. “Guuuupppppppy.”

For a brief moment, Guppy considered joining them. But, no. He had to be strong. Guppy forced himself to stay hidden.

If only he’d chosen a different magic spell to practice.

But it was too late. The damage was done. He clutched his wand, wishing he knew how to reverse the spell.

They moved closer to his hiding spot. The closet door creaked open. In the moonlight, Guppy saw a flash of white. Sharp nails dug into his skin as multiple hands yanked Guppy from his imagined safety.

“We found him!” the voices cheered.

And then the fighting began.

“He’s mine!”

“No, he’s not Brittany! Get back!”

“Get your pom-poms out of my face! I want my Guppy!”

Guppy was thrown around like a basketball in a championship game.

“Please, please, let me go!” Guppy pleaded.

Guppy asked himself, “Why, oh why, did I have to cast a love spell on the whole entire cheerleading squad?”

 And then everything faded.


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Thanks for reading! I hope you don't have any nightmares of love-crazed cheerleaders hunting you down.

You can check out the other entries Here and even vote for your favorite one (I'm #84...just in case you were wondering ;)

46 comments:

  1. Oh sweet mistake, oh delicious failure. lol.. I started out feeling worried for Guppy. Now, not so much.:) Funny story.

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    1. Thanks Kevin! Yep, he kind of had it coming to him. :)

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  2. Haha I guess he learned his lesson! And me, too! I started off being really worried for him... it sounded like he was hiding from some monster or something!! Great job :)

    I'm entry #19

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    1. LOL....he's a boy. Do they ever really learn their lesson? :) Thanks!

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  3. Cute story - just noticed you were at 100 followers - congrats!

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  4. Cute! I totally laughed at the end :)

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  5. Hahaha! When I got to the name Brittany, I thought, hang on. Surely a really dangerous creature wouldn't be called Brittany...? And then the pom-poms gave it away!

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    1. Yep. Not a lot of monsters toting around pom-poms. Thanks!

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  6. Awwww, loved it! Enjoyed the suspenseful build-up :)

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  7. I love that the guy's name is Guppy and I love the consequence. It's like those axe commercials come to life. Run for it! Nice one! :)

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  8. This is really cute! Nice twist at the end! :)

    I'm #37

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  9. Poetic justice. What a way to go though! Loved it, Roland

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    1. LOL...is that how you want to go, Roland?

      Thanks! :)

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  10. I should have known the ending was not scary, knowing you! Loved it. What a fun contest.

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    1. LOL....yep. Why would I want to write something serious? Thanks for reading! :)

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  11. Oh, Guppy. Totally voting for this one. Nice to have some lightheartedness in the mix. :)

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  12. Cute ending and wonderful name for a character.

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    1. Yes, I'm kind of partial to his name as well. He might just have to show up somewhere else. Thanks!

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  13. Very, very cute. Soldier on, Guppy! This pep rally is for you.

    Tale Spinning: Wednesday's Child

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  14. Very cute! Nice change of pace. And I love the name Guppy.

    I'm a new follower & #96 in the challenge.

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  15. Nightmares, Erin. Nightmares. :) *shivering, pulls out trusty night-light*

    But I'm going to pull through. Nice twist!

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  16. What a lovely sweet story - well done.

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  17. LOL. Well, you don't always get exactly what you wish for. Great job. Very cute!

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  18. Love the lighthearted and amusing ending! I'm #61.

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  19. Ahh, a perfect tale of be careful what you wish for. Love it. Mine is #71

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  20. This was really cute, and I loved the reveal of the spell at the end! It's just like a kid that age to do something like that. I'm #123.

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  21. It's nice to visit your blog again. What a sweet and cute story!

    #124

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  22. This gave me a laugh! Lovely punchline at the end, after you'd set up the apparent peril. Nice job!

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  23. Did he get what he deserved? That was quite funny!

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  24. I thought this was very cute. i like that you went for the humour, as most people went dark and/or gory. Like the twist, very creative. One of my faves.

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